Hi,
my name is love I am 17 years old I am currently attending high school at
Thurgood Marshall Academy. I am in the 11th grade. I was born and raised in New
York. I love this city and don't think I would ever move out of it. I am
definitely thinking about going to college as well in New York. I love school,
it is very important to me just because it has to do allot with my future. I
plan on being a Registered Nurse, and having a degree in medicine. I love to go
shopping with my friends and family. I also like sports as well such as
basketball and baseball. My favorite subject in school is English and Anatomy.
I enjoy learning new things about the human body each day that I go in class. I
also feel like it would help me in the future as my career in being a
Registered Nurse. I also always feel motivated when I go into school just because
I’m learning different things every new day. I have a small job after school downtown in 72
st in a store called urban outfitters. Just something to keep me busy instead
of being home. I come from a family of four. My mother is a police officer and
my dad is a manager of an apartment building. Lastly, my little brother, he is
eight years old in the 3rd grade. I always help him with his
homework when needed. My brother also wants a future in medicine, his dream it
to become a doctor. My entire family
originally comes from the Dominican Republic, Puerto Rico, and France. I plan
on going to each of these places to visit family I have never visited or met
before.
I love shopping and my favorite sport is baseball too!
ReplyDeleteLovely introduction. I definitely have a sense of what your life looks like and what is important to you. However, you don't develop many ideas. You introduce an idea and then move on to another idea. I'm left wondering why. Why do you want to be a nurse? Why do you love New York City? Why do you love school? What does it have to do with your future? Why do you like your job? What do you actually do there? Have you been to visit the Dominican Republic, Puerto Rico, or France? I would like you to consider this a space to develop ideas. A list of ideas doesn't really tell me what type of thinker you are.
ReplyDeleteAs a note, you don't have to indent paragraphs for text being published on the web. Instead, use two returns to separate paragraphs. I look forward to reading your next post!